Ironically, I think Devin got more screwed up under Keeran's "care" than when he was with the first dude with the long name. He actually seemed almost normal-ish...Maybe the shock of the ambiguity of the changing of situations? (Yes, purposely phrased so)Yeah, lots of errors here and there (but then there were weird moments where there were things like correctly used semicolons, which even a lot of not-ESL ppl have trouble with...), but since apparently, the author's ESL, *shrugArgh. Keeran really needs someone to slap some sense into him. Or maybe they ALL need someone to slap some sense into them. ~sighEnding was a bit of weak sauce. Kind of still leaves you at a cliffy. Oh. Wait. I see. It's still a WIP.I get the feeling that Devin will never really be normal unless Keeran backs the fuck off...which he seems to be starting to do a bit.I don't really get the feeling that the development to the point is there. Maybe I'm okay with Devin's outspokenness because I'm just tired of his cowering and want him to be happy already...Although I DO have to admit that I take some measure of enjoyment from his beautiful suffering...because he DOES suffer so beautifully...I agree with Emma's review about Devin's watchfulness. She states it quite well, so just go read what she wrote cuz I ain't paraphrasin' (lol).